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Persuasive Essay Examples

Lockers for Everyone

What would you think if you had to put your personal belongings in a crate, and every time you turn around something of yours were stolen? That is why I think students should have lockers. To protect their things, keep their things somewhere clean, and so they won't have to complain about carrying everything at once.

Students should have lockers because it will stop people from stealing their stuff.  For example, the children won't have to worry about their books, homework assignments, and personal belongings being stolen. The reason for this is that the children will have their own lockers plus their own locks, which only they have the combination to.  This will reduce cases where things are being stolen.

Students also should have lockers so they will have a clean place to put their books. What I mean by this is that many desks are rusty and have gum stuck under them.  Also, if you put you stuff into a crate then it is easily collecting dust. This connects to my argument because their stuff will be kept very clean in a neat environment if students are given lockers to use.  

My final reason why I think students should have lockers is so students won't complain about caring everything at once.  The things that they may be caring everyday are very heavy.  This is important because students may suffer health problems from having to carry all their stuff everywhere.  Why carry books everyday why you can eliminate the pain by having a locker to store the things you don't need?  Also, they're always whining about having to carry all their books.  If we had lockers everyone would be happier.

          In conclusion I think students should have lockers. If we have lockers stealing in school would go down, it would create a safe and clean place for students to put their things, and students would complain less and be healthier.  If we had lockers, the school would be a happier place for everyone.  If you don't want your things stolen, contact your principal and demand lockers for your school.


1.      Circle the attention catcher.

2.      Underline the position statement (thesis).

3.      Double underline each main point as it appears in the essay.

4.      Circle the clinching statement.

5.      What are the three main points in this essay?

Second Example

Persuasive essay

Imagine a child as young as ten years old on the website Facebook chatting with a grown man or grown woman. Should parents let their children as young as ten years old be on Facebook?  I think parents should not let their children or child be on Facebook because on Facebook there are a lot of things that are said and done that a child of that age should not be able to see.

          If a parent approves of a child being on Facebook it is very inappropriate. Because that child may tell a story about their age and someone much older may see it and think their telling the truth and start sending them messages and the child might not like it at all.

          When a child that young is on a website like Facebook they might get excited  and go overboard. For example, the child might tell where they live, their address, and a lot more information that is not needed.

          In conclusion I think parents should not let children under age get on Facebook because many different things can happen.

1.  What did the writer forgot to include in the introduction?


2.  What is the author's first main point and how could it be improved?



3.  What is the author's second main point and how could it be improved?



4.  What three things should be included in a concluding paragraph?



5.  What is the author missing from his concluding paragraph?


The following are decent examples of Persuasive / Argumentative Essays, designed to help you think about the form more deeply. They aren’t “slam dunk” essays that guarantee an “A”. In fact, we’ve given you some perspective on how writing instructors would view these examples. Notice how the grammar doesn’t really play into the analysis of the examples; the writing is competent. It’s the ideas and choices that need work.
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  • Is Technology Making Us Smarter or Dumber?
    • First up, this essay reads like a professional writer’s work – and it is.
    • By posing a question the essay delivers on an original argument (“it isn’t smarter or dumber – it’s impact…”) but it’s an answer to a question that is too broad for a short paper. Indeed, the author is working on a book-length work to address the issues he raises.
    • As an expert this author can perhaps get away with making sweeping statements about the origins of cooking, but an undergraduate writer cannot. There would need to be many more citations if this were an academic paper.
    • The essay includes a counterargument. Check! Notice the, “I think you can argue…” paragraph. Also a nice example of using “you” in writing – which many students are told never to do. It works here.
    • 11trees Grade: B+/F depending on fixing citations


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